Alexander N. Riadasa

[Alexander N. Riadasa]

I changed it to were Heather used a knife to kill her daughter and wrote how the bodies were disposed of. I hope this is better.

[Madame Lee]

The next year his father took over his schooling, and now he was about 8. His father taught him the history of Dark Magic and German as well as Slavic. Alex's father tutored him up until his 10 birthday which was when he finally considered Alex taught. It was perfect timing to since his mother was going to give birth to twins, Ethilia and Victor. The two children were cherished by the family, and constantly received the two parents attention but lLuckily, Alex was going to school the next year so he didn't really notice it.

The year he was accepted into Durmstrang was a day of celebration that gave him a brief moment of his parents love which he rarely received. His parents threw a large party, and invited all of their family but sadly the night of merriment wouldn't last. A daughter how had been disowned, and had had many attempts on her life decided to pay a visit. Vickie Nee Riadasa Yuale came to the ball with her husband, Neifle Yuale, a muggle born wizard. The two attacked the party goers, and were soon joined by friends. A massive duel resulted, and several casualties occurred.

In the end, the battle ended as Vickie and her mother dueled to the death. Heather Riadasa sent an Expulso curse at Vickie, who moved out of the way and it ended up hitting the poor child, Ethilia. In a fit of rage at her daughters death, Heather Riadasa sent curse after curse at her daughter knocking her into a wall. Heather lifted her daughter against the wall in a fight of rage, and conjured a knife. Heather stabbed her daughter through the heart with that knife. So was the end of both of her daughters and the beginning of great despair. Neifle, the husband of the now dead Vickie, attempted to strike Heather down but was ended by an exploding charm compliments of Uncle Helase. The young man was blown into a million pieces and the boys friends fled. So was the closing of a page that would go down in family history, the battle of a mother and daughter and the death of two of her daughters.

To cover up these two murders, the family sought out each one of the uninvited guest that had been present and killed them. The bodies were all disposed of by being burned or acid depending on what was available immediately after the murder.

[Alexander N. Riadasa]

I fixed all of the grammatical errors and put in a little information on why Vickie crashed the ball and attacked the party goers.

[Madame Lee]

One of his favorite teachers known simply as Professor Glurm taught him the basics of dark magic and soon taught him advanced incantations as well as curses.

Krum explains that a thorough knowledge of the Dark Arts is necessary in order to defend against them. He learns it for the better of mankind. Not for the worse.

Although Durmstrang teaches the Dark Arts as part of its curriculum, it apparently does not allow magical experimentation or torture, only limiting its study on theory. Grindelwald was thrown out of Durmstrang for surpassing the studies. Above, you are saying that a teacher taught him advance curses. This was strictly forbidden.

[Alexander N. Riadasa]

I edited it so that it should be acceptable.

[Madame Lee]

One of his favorite teachers known simply as Professor Glurm taught him the basics of dark magic and soon taught him a few spells when most of the staff was busy.

Not much is known about Durmstrang and its teachers. However, you could compare these teachers to Hogwart's staff. The only time where teachers held secret lessons was with Harry Potter and Severus Snape. However, this was extremely needed and not something ambitious. We shall skip this part for now for I do not know how the staff would take this. Please mark this quot in red. It will be easier for the staff to see where in the description I am talking about.

[Alexander N. Riadasa]

I marked it in red so the staff can easily find it.

[Madame Lee]

No one approached Heather for months, and she soon turned to drinking to drown out her rage and anger. Luckily, Alex missed this session being at Durmstrang and all. While he was at school, his mother went on a rampage breaking every picture in the house as well as every glass object. and to top it all of On top of that, she drained as many bottles of liquor she could before she passed out. Alex's Father was able to save the woman from herself, but thanks to that incident, she was left in the care of her mother, Sarah Ludsa who would put some sense into her.

During his first year at Durmstrang, Alex or Alexander as the teachers called him, (they didn't believe in nick names) was taught a few basic charms and a few bits and pieces of Dark arts history. The class were he learned Dark Arts was his easiest class since his father had taught him so much about it. The teachers were amazed by his knowledge of the subject, and thought he might just be the new student they had dreamed of. Alexander, as he was now known, spent all of his time studying so that he might carry on the family legacy of the smartest wizards in their class. He spent hours studying, and was constantly looking for some animal or insect to practice his curses or spells on which put him ahead in many of the teachers books.

The teachers took great interest in Alexander, and a few taught him a few things after school. One of his favorite teachers, known simply as Professor Glurm, taught him the basics of dark magic, and soon taught him a few spells when most of the staff was busy. The teacher was taking a great risk, but luckily he knew how to hide his after school activities. This teacher would latter play a big role in his future. Alexander was ahead of all his classmates in every class. hHe went to his second year with all perfects grades. That was his goal and he accomplished it simply by applying himself as his parents and fellow family members had done.

[Alexander N. Riadasa]

I fixed the errors.

[Madame Lee]

During his summer break he was forced to go to the ministry with his mother and the rest of his family. They were told the sentencing of the two men, his father was sentenced to the Dementor's kiss and his uncle was sentenced to life in Azkaban.

I am pretty sure that the Ministry does not kill their prisoners. They just send them to Azkaban (However, many debate weather or not if that is just a sentence of death). I would suggest you to tell that both your uncle and father were sent to Azkaban. You could always add that your father died in there. Note that it would most likely happen because of insanity.

[Alexander N. Riadasa]

Edited it to were they both got life sentences and his father died in Azkaban.

[Madame Lee]

Soon he was back at school for his second year, and his mother now accompanied by his grandmother who attempted to help the stressed woman as much as she could. This wasn't the only change in his life as well as his Family life. During the middle of his school year, Alexander was informed that his father as well as Uncle had been capture and tried for the murder of over ten muggles and five wizards. The rest of the group had been killed during a trap set by the ministry. During his summer break, he was forced to go to the ministry with his mother and the rest of his family. They were told the sentencing of the two men, his father and uncle were sentenced to life in Azkaban. His father would die 3 years later from insanity, but his Uncle would remain alive to this very day.

Thanks to a stupid follower who couldn't hold his liquor very well, the two were identified. The drunk had bragged about being taught by the two, and how he would follow their banner at beck and call. Thus was the end of their campaign and their lives.

Alexander was forced to witness his father's death and his uncle being thrown into Azkaban. That day Alexander harbored a hatred for the ministry and the muggles who he felt were at fault. Alexander returned to school a week later.

[Alexander N. Riadasa]

I added all the commas like you said.

[Madame Lee]

Thank you.

During his second year Alexander became very distant and snapped at every one he encountered. During a usual dueling class he attempted to kill his dueling partner using the expulso curse. His teacher Professor Glurm instead of being angered by this was very happy and took the child under his wing.

I think an attempt of killing a student would lead to government affairs. It is a performed threat, and a danger to another human being. You would need to reedit this if you wish your character to stay in the school.

[Alexander N. Riadasa]

I fixed it, I hope it sounds better now.